Name of Assignment: Imagery to Transport Final Draft Essay
Subject: English 100
Facilitator/Teacher: Morgan Andaluz
Description of Work/Assignment: The final essay of the “Imagery to Transport” draft is a large step of revisions after peer and instructor review. It involves applying some of the feedback your peers and your professor have given you. For example, my professor thinks about setting the central image to the Airbnb. thI have finished my final draft and it already looks a million times better than what my draft could accomplish.
Which 21st Century Skill do you feel this assignment addresses, and why?
The 21st century this assignment addresses is Thinking and Problem Solving Skills. My peers, my instructor, and I have analyzed my essay and the beginning and end of the essay seem to have deviated from the main purpose of the essay. The feedback was helpful, and I solved some mistakes my draft had.
What are you most proud of from this assignment, and why?
What I am most proud of from this assignment is the way I vividly described the house, the events within our stay, and attempting to access all 5 senses for the reader. For example, this sentence signifies what image the reader can make in their head, “I was both nervous and furious; I simply wasn’t going to accept having piles of schoolwork taller than the Burj Khalifa.”
How did you develop and/or improve upon your 21st Century Skill with this assignment?
I developed the 21st century skill by underlining some aspects of my essay which didn’t get much attention, like briefly describing the movie “McFarland” (I cannot spoil it since it ruins the experience.) I also centered the attention of the essay to the AirBnb and all the events which happened during our stay.
What was most difficult about completing this task?
What was difficult about completing this task is trying to have little to no unclear sentences, finding better words, and trying not to be redundant when trying to vividly describe things. I find “filled my nostrils” to be a bit of a clutch if used redundantly. Also, trying to get in the Active language instead of the passive language (which I still don’t fully understand).
How could you improve this work? If you could start over, what would you do different?
If I could start over, I would do exactly what I did in the final for the rough draft and pick up feedback from my peers and my instructor and apply their feedback to my new final.
How does this relate to what you have learned in the past?
The semicolon use in my essay relates to what I’ve learned in the past. Back in 9th grade we has an exercise about the proper use of semi-colons (two related independent clauses and making a list).
How can you apply this to future learning?
I can apply my vividness and using active language in the future by trying to win the readers attention in essays like these if I ever have another English class like this. Speaking actively and having less wordy sentences will help so as to not daze the reader.
Subject: English 100
Facilitator/Teacher: Morgan Andaluz
Description of Work/Assignment: The final essay of the “Imagery to Transport” draft is a large step of revisions after peer and instructor review. It involves applying some of the feedback your peers and your professor have given you. For example, my professor thinks about setting the central image to the Airbnb. thI have finished my final draft and it already looks a million times better than what my draft could accomplish.
Which 21st Century Skill do you feel this assignment addresses, and why?
The 21st century this assignment addresses is Thinking and Problem Solving Skills. My peers, my instructor, and I have analyzed my essay and the beginning and end of the essay seem to have deviated from the main purpose of the essay. The feedback was helpful, and I solved some mistakes my draft had.
What are you most proud of from this assignment, and why?
What I am most proud of from this assignment is the way I vividly described the house, the events within our stay, and attempting to access all 5 senses for the reader. For example, this sentence signifies what image the reader can make in their head, “I was both nervous and furious; I simply wasn’t going to accept having piles of schoolwork taller than the Burj Khalifa.”
How did you develop and/or improve upon your 21st Century Skill with this assignment?
I developed the 21st century skill by underlining some aspects of my essay which didn’t get much attention, like briefly describing the movie “McFarland” (I cannot spoil it since it ruins the experience.) I also centered the attention of the essay to the AirBnb and all the events which happened during our stay.
What was most difficult about completing this task?
What was difficult about completing this task is trying to have little to no unclear sentences, finding better words, and trying not to be redundant when trying to vividly describe things. I find “filled my nostrils” to be a bit of a clutch if used redundantly. Also, trying to get in the Active language instead of the passive language (which I still don’t fully understand).
How could you improve this work? If you could start over, what would you do different?
If I could start over, I would do exactly what I did in the final for the rough draft and pick up feedback from my peers and my instructor and apply their feedback to my new final.
How does this relate to what you have learned in the past?
The semicolon use in my essay relates to what I’ve learned in the past. Back in 9th grade we has an exercise about the proper use of semi-colons (two related independent clauses and making a list).
How can you apply this to future learning?
I can apply my vividness and using active language in the future by trying to win the readers attention in essays like these if I ever have another English class like this. Speaking actively and having less wordy sentences will help so as to not daze the reader.